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Sadly, this isn't even the worst situation Darcog has been in. By a long shot.

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This is the part where I would dramatically scream to the heavens, "WE'RE ALL GOING TO DIIIIIIIEEEEEEEE" except, well, I already have.

Opponent: :iconcloudslide:

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:iconbluetuesdays:
BlueTuesdays Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
Man your characters are kicking arses and taking names.  I really enjoyed watching No_Name's cycle of emotions, from sadness, despair to frustration and outrage. Its been really interesting watching how his character has developed throughout the rounds, and I'm glad that he is now taking a stand for himself, now that he is all alone. Just curious, Is that the real claiming him as their property? :D

Might have said this before, but I really like the way you've been doing your comics. Having the reader stop panel by panel, it really forces our concentration in absorbing all of the little details in your story.   I do feel that where No_name changes from confused to angry, that it feels a bit abrupt, and may need just an additional panel there to ease the transition of emotions, so that it feels more natural to the reader. I.e
confused->understanding/irritation->Anger/frustration. Mostly so that you continue the really well done transitions between one panel to the next.

GL for the next round
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:iconyubria:
Yubria Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014
Thank you! I'm glad you've enjoyed reading so far and I appreciate the critique. :)
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:iconamarathimi:
Amarathimi Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist

Finally had a chance to read and comment your round. Sorry for the wait. -.-‘


The sequence with [no-name] being all worried about gulper is played out really well. Love his poses and the variety of emotions he is going through. Also the sequence where Darcog was battling with the judges was choreographed very well.  Everything fit together smoothly.


The round had many interesting ideas like ‘the rogue characters’ and ‘the dead character’ (YAY! You finally have a face when you are a ghost. XD) I also like how you portrayed cloudslides team and played around with their skills and mechanics.


If you don’t mind critique, some parts of the round were a little bit cryptic and took a few reads to figure out what’s going on (like the part where [no-name] is starting to use his powers). The round is probably meant to force the reader to try to interpret things, so it isn’t so much of an issue. Also some perspective problems in few panels (like the “HOLLY!” “AAAH!” panel, where bunny looks quite huge for some reason).

I really enjoyed reading your round! Good luck with the results! :hug:

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:iconyubria:
Yubria Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013
Thank you! I appreciate the comments and critique- AATR is giving me the chance to do things I haven't done before, so it's nice to know what did and didn't work from someone else's perspective. By the time I get to the end of making my rounds I usually end up thinking, "I still like these parts, but everything else is crap and I wish I didn't cut out this part, etc." so I don't even know how accurate my own opinion is. XD So thank you again, and good luck to you!
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:iconamarathimi:
Amarathimi Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist

I completely agree. Getting a chance to experiment and learn from it is really useful. :nod:


For me it’s more about learning comic medium in general, since I haven’t done any comics before AatR. Critiques are very useful to point out what works and still needs improvement.


Best luck to you too. It would be an honor to have you as opponent if we end up against each other on next round. I really enjoy how you write characters and your line-art very pretty to look at! ^^

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:iconyubria:
Yubria Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014
Wow, you're REALLY doing a good job if this is your first comic. I'm definitely still learning about comics myself, but I've been working on and off with them for several years by now, so I'd be happy to offer any help/advice/critique if you like, even before the round is finished. ^^

Thank you, and good luck to you too!
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:iconamarathimi:
Amarathimi Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you! :blushes: I have done some shorter comic strip or short 1-2 page comics before, but nothing nearly as big and complicated as my AatR entries. I read a lot of comics though and have written some books and short stories before, so that helps a lot with the storytelling.

Your experience really shows. I'd love tho get critique and advice! (maybe on the finished work, because I'd hate to spam you with wip's)

I can try to give some in return too. ^^
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:iconfishy-kun:
fishy-kun Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013
GASP 80
8)
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:iconyubria:
Yubria Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013
8D
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Doodlee-a Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Student Digital Artist
FFFFFffffff...flargabaaargh. Cliff-hanger...
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:iconyubria:
Yubria Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013
:D
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:iconfox-frost:
Fox-Frost Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013
You get your face back, but it cost you an arm and a life. Nice.
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:iconyubria:
Yubria Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013
It was not a fair trade, man. I want my drawing arm back.
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